The adventure seems pretty solid, and an interesting break from the regular Starfinder universe. It could be laid out a little better, and they could do with a bit of proofreading. Also, I could do without some of the campaign setting aspects to its backstory. Hell, one paragraph in particular in the introduction reads like a literal fedora with arms wrote it.
TL;DR Fix the layout, do some proofreading, maybe get rid of the neckbeardy crap, and this could be a solidly funny AP.